Domestic Violence
Family Violence is a social problem; affect a high
percentage of families in any community, in all economic and cultural levels.
These are relationships that involve an abuse of power by his control abuse.
This abuse can be emotional, physical, sexual, financial or environmental
partner. The abusive person develops their behavior in private, showing outwardly
respectable, unsuspected. Violent behavior is compatible with
any appearance, ability, intelligence, activity, profession. Including
those whose family and community performance, institutional or the outside are
seemingly above suspicion, people subjected to domestic violence situations
present a weakening of their physical and psychological defenses, with
devaluation, increased health problems, many suffer from depression or illness
psychosomatic, and desire to die, with a marked decrease in job performance. In
children and adolescents appear: learning difficulties, behavioral problems and
interpersonal problems. Children who were victims of violence or who grew up in
this context, tend to play them on their future relations and impact families and communities.
In recent years it’s have been realized great efforts to
recognize that domestic violence as a human rights violation. Due to this
reason you must make them aware of fighting in both men and women that family
unity is made based on love and respect and above all on God's commandments. We
must show them that life today is not easy to raise and educate our children we
represent a lot of effort and pressures that can lead to the wrong road and
take our anger, worries and frustrations with the family when they are the
least indicated to receive a bad treatment by parents. If we are not able to
handle our grief, anger and concerns and make it our family to live moments of
suffering because of them it is better to seek both spiritual and psychological
support, which will bring many positive benefits including members of our
family. In conclusion every effort that every member of the family do, contribute
to avoid domestic violence and we also taught the new generation the importance
of the family in our society.
I found the information from the first paragraph on the following links:
ResponderBorrarhttps://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Domestic_violence
http://www.clavedevida.com.ar/self/violencia.html
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