miércoles, 21 de octubre de 2015

Problem and Solution Paragraph



Domestic Violence


Family Violence is a social problem; affect a high percentage of families in any community, in all economic and cultural levels. These are relationships that involve an abuse of power by his control abuse. This abuse can be emotional, physical, sexual, financial or environmental partner. The abusive person develops their behavior in private, showing outwardly respectable, unsuspected. Violent behavior is compatible with any appearance, ability, intelligence, activity, profession. Including those whose family and community performance, institutional or the outside are seemingly above suspicion, people subjected to domestic violence situations present a weakening of their physical and psychological defenses, with devaluation, increased health problems, many suffer from depression or illness psychosomatic, and desire to die, with a marked decrease in job performance. In children and adolescents appear: learning difficulties, behavioral problems and interpersonal problems. Children who were victims of violence or who grew up in this context, tend to play them on their future relations and impact families and communities.

In recent years it’s have been realized great efforts to recognize that domestic violence as a human rights violation. Due to this reason you must make them aware of fighting in both men and women that family unity is made based on love and respect and above all on God's commandments. We must show them that life today is not easy to raise and educate our children we represent a lot of effort and pressures that can lead to the wrong road and take our anger, worries and frustrations with the family when they are the least indicated to receive a bad treatment by parents. If we are not able to handle our grief, anger and concerns and make it our family to live moments of suffering because of them it is better to seek both spiritual and psychological support, which will bring many positive benefits including members of our family. In conclusion every effort that every member of the family do, contribute to avoid domestic violence and we also taught the new generation the importance of the family in our society.

2 comentarios:

  1. I found the information from the first paragraph on the following links:

    https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Domestic_violence
    http://www.clavedevida.com.ar/self/violencia.html

    Please, acknowledge other authors' ideas.

    Regarding the second paragraph, you state that people need to be educated either psychological or spiritually. You explain the last one but not the first one.

    There are a few subject-verb agreement mistakes.

    There are punctuation mistakes, specially after transitional words or phrases.

    About the organization of ideas:

    *Problem paragraph.

    The concluding sentence is not paraphrasing the topic sentence.

    *Solution paragraph.
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